The following passages contain unnecessary jargon, padded phrases, and affectati

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The following passages contain unnecessary jargon, padded phrases, and affectation. Revise the passages to eliminate this language:

I hereby designate Mr. White, who has been holding the position and serving in the capacity of assistant technical supervisor, to be named and appointed to the position and function of deputy director of customer relations. In his newly elevated position, Mr. White will report, in the first instance directly to the department director—that is, to me.

Purchasers of the enclosed substance should carefully and thoroughly follow the instructions provided herein for the use of the substance, and should in no case whatsoever consume, or otherwise partake of said substance without proceeding in the manner set forth on the accompanying set of circular instructions.

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Answer: revised passage is:
I, The department director, designate the appointment of Mr.White,the assistant technical supervisor to the function and position of deputy supervisor to the function and position of deputy supervisor. He will report directly to me, in the first instance after joining the promoted position.
Consumer should carefully follow the instruction enclosed in the product be taken without following procedure enclosed in instruction manual.

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