Rewrite the email to improve structure and accessibility, eliminate redundancy,

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Rewrite the email to improve structure and accessibility, eliminate redundancy, correct grammar, and improve word choice. Turn the email into a clear, concise piece of correspondence.

From:               Lynn Copeland                                                Sent:    March 16, 2017

To:                   Department Managers

Cc:

Subject:           Temporary Workers

This is to inform you that we have not been totally happy with the quality of the temporary workers we are getting. We have trouble budgeting for them, their selection is difficult, and so is the hiring of these extra workers.

Hoping to improve the problem, your help is requested. We need to know your past history in regard to the average number of temporary office workers in your department. This number would be based on how many you use each month. Your input is also requested in regard to the time a temporary worker remains in your employ. As a general rule, do you know the length of a temporary worker’s work assignment? We’re talking about your department only, of course. Another important bit of information revolves around the skills you need. To get you the best temps, your needs must be known. As a matter of fact, we also would like to know what temporary agencies you now use to supply temps to your department.

Pursuant to this request, we need your response by April 1. It would be advisable for you to write your answers in your reply to this message. Pending receipt of the return of this request, may we take the liberty of thanking you in advance. Through the use of the information you provide, we will make plans for an improved policy. That will help you fill your temporary employment needs pertaining to your department as efficiently as possible.

Regards,

Lynn

Explanation / Answer

Recipients- Departmental managers

Subject -Improved quality of workers

Quality of workers hired by the human resource department is not upto the expectations. Hiring ,selecting and budgeting them is being difficult day by day. Urgent contribution is required by you.We need to know your past history in regard to the average number of temporary office workers in your department. This number would be based on how many you use each month. Your input is also requested in regard to the time a temporary worker remains in your employ. As a general rule, do you know the length of a temporary worker’s work assignment? We’re talking about your department only, of course. Another important bit of information revolves around the skills you need. To get you the best temps, your needs must be known. As a matter of fact, we also would like to know what temporary agencies you now use to supply temps to your department.

KINDLY ACKNOWLEDGE AND REVERT BACK BY APRIL 1.

REGARDS

LYNN

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