Please review my cover letter and resume and let me know if I can make improveme

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Please review my cover letter and resume and let me know if I can make improvements and what they are. Also if you think I did a good job please let me know what you liked about it.

xxx A. xxx

xx Wilson Avenue

xxxx, NY xxxx

October 3, 2015

PF Chang’s

xxx Colonie xxxx

Albany, NY xxxxx

Dear Hiring Manager:

I read with interest your posting for Restaurant Manager on www.Indeed.com. I believe I possess the necessary skills and experience you are seeking and would make a valuable addition to your company. In today's economy, there's no time to waste on workers who lack the necessary skills and motivation. I've got what you need.

As my resume indicates, I possess more than 15 years of progressive experience in the hospitality field. My professional history includes positions such as Tournant/Line Chef at Four Seasons Hotel as well as Banquet Supervisor at The W Hotel. Most recently, my responsibilities as Line Chef at Midtown Tap and Tearoom match the qualifications you are seeking.

As the Line Chef, my responsibilities included managing the kitchen staff, careful planning of menu items and effective communication with the senior staff. I assisted in the successful completion of restructuring the staff and producing a solid team. My supervisor also relied on my ability to lead the team and be inspiring.

I have attached my resume for your review and I look forward to speaking with you further regarding your available position.

Sincerely,

xxxx A. xxxx

Enclosure

Job Details

Top of Form

Job Number

14-0086

Title

Restaurant Manager

City

Albany

State

NY

Work Hours

Restaurant Hours

Status

Full Time

Description

Your success is our success!

Founded in 1993, P.F. Chang’s menu remains true to its original vision of creating delicious cuisine inspired by the Asian culture. No wonder we now operate over 200 restaurants worldwide.

At P.F. Chang’s we know that we can’t continue to grow and succeed without people with talent, passion and vision. That’s why we’re looking for someone like you.

When you take charge as a Restaurant Manager you are responsible for the selection, development and performance of the front of house hospitality staff. You will ensure our guests enjoy a memorable experience by demonstrating and empowering our hospitality staff to live up to our company message – “We are truly glad that you are here and will do everything we can to make you want to come back.”

You’ll drive our success and we’ll reward you with professional development and ongoing opportunities to build your career with a global leader. Are you ready to take charge at P.F. Chang’s?

Requirements

Our Restaurant Managers come from a variety of backgrounds. Although experience in the restaurant industry is a huge plus, we will consider candidates with similar experience. Here are some factors that may enable you to jumpstart your success in this position:
• A minimum of 3 years restaurant management experience in casual upscale dining preferred
• Customer service focused and oriented
• Must be able to work an average of 55 hours work per week
• Skillful planner with knowledge of basic business fundamentals
• Strong communication skills with the ability to resolve conflict
• Outgoing personality with expertise at developing relationships and leading others
• Infectious, positive attitude that inspires others
• Must be able to stand and walk for periods of eight to ten hours in length, each shift
• Must be able to reach, bend, balance and transport various objects weighing up to 30 pounds repeatedly during a shift. At times it might be necessary to lift up to 50 pounds.

Benefits:
We value our employees’ time and efforts. Our commitment to your success is enhanced by our competitive salary, bonus plan, and an extensive benefits package including medical, dental and vision benefits, 401K plan and future growth opportunities within the company. Plus, we work to maintain the best possible environment for our employees, where people can learn and grow with the company.

Apply on-line today!

P.F. Chang's is an Equal Opportunity and e-Verify Employer.

Explanation / Answer

Improvements: The first paragraph of your cover letter is not very professional. The first line "i read with interest" can be rephrased as - this is with reference to your posting for Restaurant Manager on www.Indeed.com. The rest of the paragraph is not required and can be deleted.

The 2nd paragraph should outline your skills and experience and its relevance for the job. It should be - "I have more than 15 years of progressive experience in the hospitality field. I see that this role demands the ability to enhance customer service, good communication skills, good leadership skills and ability to inspire others. As Line Chef at Midtown Tap, i have experience in leading a team.

I am a physically active and fit adult and can easily lift obejects weighing upto 50 pounds.

The last line should be the closing lines which summarizes your suitability for the role - "Together with my professional qualifications, proven track record and desire to advance further, I feel I am more than ready for the challenges your position offers."

What i liked: The 2nd and 3rd paragraph of your cover letter is good, and precise. It could, however, be more crisp. It highlights your professional experience and your skills and highlights their relevance for the current opening being advertised.

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