Please help check my grammar, sentence structure, punctuation, topic sentences.

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Please help check my grammar, sentence structure, punctuation, topic sentences. Thank you very very much!

My result shows my score for EI and WI is way lower than national average. This result is accurate to an extent, but I’m not completely agree with it. Most of the time, I would like to spent time alone, it helps me to concentrate on my work. Especially when I try to solve any problems, I would like everyone else to ignore me so I can figure things out faster. It really depends on the situation as well. I also love to work with a group of people, because everyone has their ideas, and it just makes everything better. I love to spent time with my family and close friends, I actually need them by my sides otherwise I would be feel so lonely. So, I expected “my need to include others and to be included by others” score is higher than 0.

For control, my score is roughly same with national average score. I usually let other people decide on what they want to do first. I will ask to be in charge of the situations when I really know what to do and how to solve things. Another thing is, I don’t want other people to take control over my own problems. I’ll ask them for advices, but after that, I have to decide what I really want to do with the situations. I agree with affection result. I love to share my ideas and thoughts with other people. And hopefully they find my ideas useful and have some affective level to them

My total score is 22, which is lower than national average. I agree with this result, I don’t mind being alone most of the time. I find it’s calming and peaceful that way. I like to listen and observe situations and people around me more. I usually keep things to myself, I don’t share a lot. But I do need people when I’m in a difficult situation.

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My result shows the score for EI and WI way lower than the national average. This result is accurate to an extent, but I do not completely agree with it. Most of the time, I like to spend time alone, it helps me to concentrate on my work. Especially when I have some problem at hand then I prefer everyone else to ignore me so that I can figure out things faster. It really depends on the situation as well. I also love to work with a group of people, because everyone has their ideas, and it just makes everything better. I love to spend time with my family and close friends, I actually need them by my side otherwise I feel so lonely. So, I expected “my need to include others and to be included by others” score is higher than 0.

For control, my score is roughly same with the national average score. I usually let other people decide what they want to do first. I will be in charge of the situations when I really know what to do and how to solve things. Another thing is, I don’t want other people to take control over my own problems. I’ll ask them for advice, but after that, It is my decision what I really want to do with the situations. I agree with the affection result. I love to share my ideas and thoughts with other people. And hopefully, they find my ideas useful and find them effective.

My total score is 22, which is lower than the national average. I agree with this result, I don’t mind being alone most of the time. I find it’s calming and peaceful that way. I more like to listen to people observe and situations that are happening around me. I usually keep things to myself, I don’t share a lot. But I do need people when I’m in a difficult situation.

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